I know this looks kind of cramped. I was a little restricted by my paper size, but I would definitely allow for the entire elephant's head to be shown in a full color illo.
Both the elephant and hippo's pages need work, I know. I would include the landscape as part of the scene, and alter the rope position somewhat.
I really enjoyed taking the story from beginning to end. It was a lot of work, but more importantly showed that I could. It's definitely boosted my confidence about my chosen field. Now I'll probably pick one of these scenes to put in full color to add to my portfolio.